I want to start off by saying that I am definitely NOT a tribal dancer so many of the things that tribal dancers do intentionally sometimes look unintentional to me, so please forgive my ignorance to your style, if I exhibit it.

I don't usually like belly dance/ burlesque, but I really enjoyed the first piece. Your playful nature lightened it a bit and took away what sometimes comes across wrong. Very cute and flirty...not a bit trampy. Are you aware that you transition with a little kick. I see many tribal dancers do this so it may be intentional, but just in case. The tribal back bend and drop...gorgeous!!! The transition back up to standing, smooth and fluid...lovely!!!

I think your strengths lay in the slow smooth movements, but some of your quick combinations in the second piece seem a bit "cut-off", if you will. I would just say be mindful that even quick movements get finished all the way through the rhythm and all the way through the body. I would also say that the beginning of the second piece is a bit spastic; you are moving very quickly from one move to the next, but no one move seems finished. As soon as you settled into a combination it seemed to tighten back up again. Was any of this improv? You didn't seem committed to the beginning sequence of the second number.

Also, are you aware that you accent locks with bent hands, sometimes it looks great and works but other times it seems odd. Again, I see many tribal dancers do this so it may also be intentional. I would just make sure that you watch the video again and see if you are really accenting the lock or if the hand gestures have become a crutch.

All-in-All I would say very well done. Well conceptualized, well executed; just a bit of polish to shine it up.

By the way, I don't have a video of my latest choreo, but as soon as I do I will post it here and you can tell me what you think....Fair warning; I am a sparkle girl through and through.
Melodi